Joshua Ha 6/19/15
English Period 1
Context Reflection
For my final exam I will be revising one of my old slice of life's. I am showing off that I have changed a lot. I chose slice of life because I remember this moment very well. I have made a lot of improvements by fixing my grammar.
The Piece
It was the fourth quarter of our last soccer game the score was one to one. It was a very cold November day it was very cloudy too. It was a horrible day to play soccer the field was way too muddy from last nights storm. I could smell the grass and my teammates sweat, the of the two is quite interesting. The fourth quarter started out really boring the other team kept taking the ball and we would take it back. Suddenly the ball hit one of my teammates ball inside the 18 yard box. Now I was on the edge of the bench. The referee blew his whistle indicating a penalty kick. The other team rejoiced, while we sat in silence. We waited for him to kick, our hearts were beating 100 miles per hour. I looked over to my right and I saw my friend Marco on his knees with his hands together and eyes closed. The kicker raised his hand and ran at the ball. The ball graciously lifted from the ground and went over the goal. We jumped up and rejoiced, and the other team sat in silence. We joked around by raising both of our arms pretending to be a referee at a football game and saying it’s good. The score didn’t change and we tied the game everyone wanted to play more but it was too dark. We went home upset that the season ended like that. When I arrived at my house I told my parents all about the game and how disappointed I was.
About the Author
Hello I am a student at Dewitt Middle School. I am a seventh grader. I have changed a lot because I have improved a lot because I am seeing stupid mistakes in my writing. I have changed a lot because I told my stories in the beginning of the year and now I show my stories.
About the author
ReplyDeleteMy name is Tony Kinchen and I go to dewitt middle school. As an english student i’ve always enjoyed it when we did story creating assignments. I enjoyed the fact that i could create a story in just a matter of minutes just by creating a fantasy world. I have enjoyed english this year because i learned new skills that can assist me in creating my own adventure stories.
Alpha Team
Prologue: Welcome to our lives
Before I tell you this, you have to do something for me. You have to open your minds to the impossible. The reason I’m telling you this is because what I am about to tell you may seem somewhat as a sci fi adventure movie, but unfortunately its my life, our lives. Jack, Max, Ryla, and myself were not your typical teenagers. A scientific division in U.S.A’s biological weapons division genetically altered us to be used as biological warfare weapons, living weapons. Each of us were genetically changed so that are skin creates an armor stronger than titanium that gives us unreal abilities. We were each given a specific ability assigned to us based on our height, age, and blood type under the codename of “cyber soldiers”.
Unfortunately, our armors are genetically grafted into us. If we try to separate ourselves from our armors it will be as trying to rip our skin off our flesh. We were each supposed to be sent to different parts of the U.S (Washington, Texas, Mexico you name it) to be used as a last resort to contain things normal police forces could not handle such as riots and revolts. A couple others including myself were deemed “successful” and were going to be shipped out as a new type of law enforcement in Mexico to keep riots from breaking out as they did over the discussion about the border control crisis. Luckily, though we escaped when a “failed experiment” created with a self-destruct feature spontaneously exploded. We managed to leave unnoticed but ever since we have had to deal with agents, generals, and scientist that either wanted to use us as weapons or experiments. However, they were nothing compared to Omega. In case you are wondering Omega is basically our hunter and were the prey. For every group of Alphas there was one Omega to keep them in check. After the factory explosion only one Omega remained operational and he was sent out by the agents to find everyone like us. I know what you are thinking “big deal one guy wants to capture you” but this is not a normal agent we can take in 2 minutes, he has armor that adapts to any cyber soldier he is sent after. Armor that is genetically grafted into his DNA just like ours.
Now that I got that unpleasant business out of the way, let me tell you about my family. Jack goes to fast, literally he can go up to 475 miles a minute! He is 5 feet four inches 13 years old tan and extremely annoying (don't tell him I said that or I’ll never hear the end of it). Max is a young African boy the same height and age as Jack and is Jack's partner in crime. He can generate electronic shields that spring up on command and can be thrown as hand grenades. He mainly uses this ability to prank us and then uses the shields as protection from our wrath (literally), but in general their both good kids that look out for each other as brothers. Ryla is the same age as me and is 5 feet 4 inches has blackish brown hair and she is able to sense other living things life signature a mile away, if it was not for her we would have been caught by Omega or the Agents a long time ago. Ryla and I are the oldest ones in the group and Jack and Max are the youngest ones in the group. We may all come from different pasts but we are all a family and we share the same future. Who am I you ask? My name is Jason I’m 6 feet 2 inches 16 years old and I am 15 times stronger than the strongest man in the world. Welcome to our lives!