Slice Of Life

Deborah Thornton                                                                                                             English
June 16, 2015                                                                                                                    Period. 1



Context And Reflection:

The piece I chose was a “Slice of Life” I wrote earlier in the year. It tells what happened about what I do on weekends. It’s about my cats and about what I do on weekends, it tells people that I like to run and that I have  2 pet cats. The learning I am “showing off” is that I can go into very descriptive writing, showing the 5 senses in the writing. I chose this this piece because, it was probably the most appropriate piece to revise, and add to. Changes I did to the piece was adding more descriptive details to specific parts (5 senses). I also put more facts in about how that day went. These changes will make my piece better, because the whole point of the piece I chose was to make the writing more detailed and so it would use a lot more imagery as the reader reads it.

The Piece:

The cool breeze blew through my long dark brown hair.  The soft green grass beneath my feet, with two furry soft kittens near by. I step over the two creatures and started to run, colors of green, yellow, and blue I can see out of the corner of my eye. I run down a road for around a mile, then I turn around and find the two furry creatures right behind me. I started to walk back towards my house. As I approach the top of my rocky driveway, I start to run again. When I got to the bottom of my driveway, I sat down on  a huge gray rock. The rock was smooth, but right when I went to sit down the two kittens hopped onto my lap. I pet their backs for awhile. I heard birds chirping and I a loud purr come from my cats. I watched the sky turn from pink, to purple, to yellow, to black, as the sun went down. Not much later, I was sitting in the dark and everything around me was calm and quiet, and dark. I looked up at the sky watching the stars that sparkled like diamonds and small flying insects fly around my head. I looked down to see to half dozed off kittens in my lap. I brought them into my garage and set them onto a warm blanket. Then I walked into my warm house, and went to bed.

About The Author:

I’m Deborah Thornton, an Asian on the fire ants team at Dewitt Middle School. I have definitely improved as a writer this year that last year. As an English student, comparing myself from this year to last year I can tell you that I haven’t really changed. I still push myself to the most I can give to assignments and I still make sure that the assignment is in on time or earlier. As a 6th grader, I know that last year my spelling wasn’t perfect, I made a lot of grammar mistakes, and I used big words but used them in the wrong way. This year I have learned a lot of new words and when to use them in the right context. I also learned a lot more about when to put apostrophes and when to cut a sentence into a few, so it won’t become a run on sentence.  Using these comparisons from last year to this year, I have definitely grown as a writer, and also in many other ways too.